Agreus
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Need help and or approval
this is the basics for my backstory . plz fel free to give any opinions or suggestions
Born to a well to do family consisting of himself and is father, his mother dying giving birth to him
father bred him to be a great war hero to bring honor and legend to the family name
trained in fencing and the "noble" fighting arts a code of honor and chivalry
given to his father's influence, as either a merchant or lesser noble/ landowner, he was given a command of a small force of a neighboring local noble.
his first battle, seeing the horrors of uncivalized war, he fled the battlefield and his command
when his men returned he was branded, literally , a coward and returned to his fathers estate
his father disqusted by him sent him from his sight never to return
living years as a beggar and a cutthroat he learned that the horrors of man know no bounds.
grew from a frail boy of morals to a man with allegiances and pity for none
thrown into underground fights to entertain the rich he quickly was recongized as a man with skill, raw but there
trained by a noble as a bodyguard, when asked to commit audacities to a poor family in debt to his master he fought and ultimatly killed his former employer
on the run and without a home he wandered from town to town until finally learning of a unit with honor and a will to fight.
fights in the front line with little respect for himself ...possibly trying to rid himself of the demons he must bear
perhaps he could finally earn his family the respect they deserve
soo thats what i have so far .
my character has 2 names in Dag.
Maxwell McVaern his given name - not used except by few he trusts with his story and life...so not many
Agreus ( Agro- gaelic for to demolish / eus meaing a profession ie it is my profession to destroy/demolish) this is the name most if not all will use
i am looking obviously at a gaelic/ scottish background
wears scar visable to all and gives little explanation for it till he knows ppl
so plz any help / suggstions would be appreciated and welcomed
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what goblin army....i dont see a goblin army
Reggie
Prettiest Gooblin in Eryndor
Knight of the Holy Order of the Janky Pommel
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1/25/2010, 11:47 pm
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Atalan
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Re: Backstory Help Thread
There is a unit policy, just so you know, that your character may only have dead parents if that in fact matches your reality. I apologize for pointing this out if it is the reality.
I would recommend some revision for punctuation and word choice, eg: atrocities instead of audacities.
It reads like you have an outline to the story, and that's perfectly good for your back-story.
To help fill in some details you can always browse through the Eryndor website. http://eryndor.com
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Vision without a plan is hallucination.
I do not ask for fewer foes, I only ask for a stronger axe.
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1/26/2010, 11:18 am
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Uual
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Re: Backstory Help Thread
Just curious if every person at Naugbar have to be inside the mountain cities of the dwarves there or can there be a small village near the coast.
If not then I need to look for another place to be from in Eryndor.
If so, great and do I just post my back story here on the forums when it is done or do the officers need a copy?
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1/26/2010, 11:24 pm
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Uual
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Re: Backstory Help Thread
Also was wondering which member of the Fury would most likely be left behind?
Not on purpose but maybe because they party too hard or are whatever.
its for my backstory and how I meet the Fury
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1/29/2010, 1:10 am
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Thurston2028
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thats kind of a hard call...thats part of what makes the fury the fury. we are a band of people from many different backgrounds that came together and just happend to stay hanging out.
i will put up myself and azhara up for sort of the renegades of the group...we are assassins and mercenaries that just happened to come across the group and chose to hang out for a bit.
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"Vires et Decus"
"Teach by example, if your student does not survive then he was not worthy of the lesson"
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Uual
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ok thanks Thurston
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a11438
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Corporal Michael J. Caboose (birth name Perry Cox) was born in a horse stable outside of Lower Boston, a city on the western border of Eryndor. Caboose was a member of The Sopranos; an elite Black Ops program that focused on intelligence gathering and spooning. I say “was” because in a expedition behind enemy line of The Senegal’s Finest, his whole team was ambushed from behind and slaughtered as he was squatting over a hole he dug some 50 feet away to relieve pressure from the previous nights chili-rama. Stuck miles behind enemy lines with no backup or support, all he could do was go into the woods, find the straightest branch he could and carve a point into the end to use as a makeshift spear. He then began his long, painful, somewhat homo-erotic journey back to his base camp safely within the borders of Legacy of the Lifetree. Upon returning he was promoted to Corporal for “outstanding bravery”. He has joined the Fury of the Called because he feels that it is his duty to avenge the deaths of his teammates. Also, the explosive diarrhea he had on the fateful night when his squad was slaughtered will not subside until Megamarth is defeated once and for all.
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Adia Brody
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You wouldn't exactly say "behind enemy line of the senegal's finest." That's the name of their unit, but they are the sailors of the Lady Senegal. Same goes for legacy, you'd say the eryndor crusade, I believe. Also, the death of his teammates? This isn't basketball.  <3
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3/4/2010, 3:02 am
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LeosSparto
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That's a lie i treat the game like the NBA all the time. So does Reggie, but, he has a much more valid reason.
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Adia Brody
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Also, there is no "lower boston." Look at the map of the continent on the eryndor website. Eryndor was just a foresty city, which has basically been destroyed. Try finding a city you like that actually exists. Read up on the background of it, though.
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